SOLANUM Posted June 27, 2008 Content Count: 1933 Joined: 08/13/07 Status: Offline Share Posted June 27, 2008 (edited) Well I got bored so I just sat down and started writing what came to mind, this was the result. I wouldnt call it a song, it doesnt sound great when it's said outloud. I like to think of it as a poem of sorts. The structure and story behind it is taken from the Rammstein song Du Riechst So Gut (you smell so good) Infact the "chorus" takes that very line. Aannyyway here it is! --------------------------------- You look wonderful i watch you as you sprint away the cold air is tireing you the sun is setting i'll take my time a frightend child crys out because it needs it's mother i'll find you your tracks still are fresh on the bridge drops of blood cover the fresh snow i have you now, dont try and fight a distressed mother crys out for it's dying child you smell so good you smell so good. you run from me, i smile you smell so good I've found you so good so good. you can try and flee you smell so good it will be pointless you begin to cry it wont be much longer now you wish that you were home the rats scurry in anticipation they sense your fear, they can taste it they know you'll give in soon you smell so good you smell so good you ran from me, it was fun you smell so good i've found you so good so good you tried to flee it was pointless ----------------------------- Was totally written by me. Didnt think I had that creativity Sol Edited June 27, 2008 by SOLANUM Link to comment
Maxwelldon Posted June 27, 2008 Content Count: 1730 Joined: 02/15/08 Status: Offline Share Posted June 27, 2008 Ye well, I wrote this long ago and I hear from some people they like it :blush: Notice also that I'm not giving no permission copy this anywhere as it's what I've written all by myself Is there anything or something you want to tell? - Something that you feel -- or anything you hide from me? I feel like I'm being lied to! - I feel like I'm left outside! -- I feel like you hide something from me! What is this feeling I got inside of me? - So innocent and pure you made me feel.. -- But now that I have opened my eyes, I see what you've done to me! You came in and made me fall in love! - You came in and made feel so much loved! -- But still you did break my heart!! Now I feel so lonely inside of me. - Now I feel broken inside. So broken that nothing can fix this pain. The pain that you caused by breaking my heart! What is this feeling I got inside of me? - So innocent and pure you made me feel.. -- But now that I have opened my eyes, I see what you've done to me! You came in and made me fall in love! - You came in and made feel so much loved! -- But still you did break my heart!! I'm so disapointed in you. - I'm so lonely with this pain.. -- I'm so lonely with this pain what you caused me feel.. - So lonely, that it can't be real! ( But it is ) What is this feeling I got inside of me? - So innocent and pure you made me feel.. -- But now that I have opened my eyes, I see what you've done to me! You came in and made me fall in love! - You came in and made feel so much loved! -- But still you did break my heart!! This is the feeling I got inside of me, - so lonely and disappointed what you've done to me... Link to comment
GrayFox Posted June 27, 2008 Content Count: 2433 Joined: 06/20/08 Status: Offline Share Posted June 27, 2008 Yea wtf rape? Link to comment
Soviet1 Posted June 27, 2008 Content Count: 331 Joined: 02/11/08 Status: Offline Share Posted June 27, 2008 This sounds like the song of a stalker. Yea wtf rape? *ahem* Agree. Link to comment
SOLANUM Posted June 27, 2008 Content Count: 1933 Joined: 08/13/07 Status: Offline Share Posted June 27, 2008 Well, its kinda supposed to sound that way, kinda double sided. On one side its what you guys said and on the other its a pred in nature after it's prey. Sol Link to comment
LitKey Posted June 28, 2008 Content Count: 2445 Joined: 05/15/07 Status: Offline Share Posted June 28, 2008 poems... ? I lol'd. Link to comment
PotshotPolka Posted June 28, 2008 Content Count: 6084 Joined: 03/31/08 Status: Offline Share Posted June 28, 2008 Oh fuck me, now we're going to have to have a haiku showdown... Link to comment
Repeat Posted June 28, 2008 Content Count: 1384 Joined: 10/05/07 Status: Offline Share Posted June 28, 2008 *runs away scared* Link to comment
matt 187 Posted June 28, 2008 Content Count: 2678 Joined: 08/07/07 Status: Offline Share Posted June 28, 2008 poems... ? I lol'd. same xD Link to comment
Modgers1 Posted June 28, 2008 Content Count: 2903 Joined: 02/01/08 Status: Offline Share Posted June 28, 2008 Interesting... -Modgers Link to comment
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